Sunday, May 4, 2008

Poem by Sarah Mäkelä

Here is a poem I have written. Check it out, and I'd love to read any comments that you may have. =)

Red Zone

Blood pours down my nose
I try to pull back, but
It floods my throat,
choking me.
My eyes water, and
My mouth parts,
But no air escapes.
I’m trapped in this red zone
Waiting for a savior, and dying
For my next breath.

4 deadly screams:

Anonymous said...

i personally loked it only wish it was longer

Sierra Wolfe said...

Nice poem, Sarah! Very vivid!

Sierra

Gracen Miller said...

Nice and dark, Sarah. It rather had me choking along with her. You covered the senses very well. =)

Sarah said...

Awww! Thanks guys!! :D